I see a mirror in front of the tiny basin
I flinch at my reflection;
There is a man behind me
Holding my hair, gently
Like a professional hairdresser,
planting a pony tail.
I see a mirror in front of the green round basin,
I stopped in the moment-
As the pause,
While watching a movie with DVD
during the washroom break,
Or
At times for the freshly danced churmurey.
The man played a song from Barfi
Placing tiny droplet shaped toothpaste
Flavoured with mint, and love.
I see a mirror in front of the rectangular gold basin,
The man in the reflection had a gentle smile.
I fell on my knees
Begging the reflection to be of one
Mine, mine alone!
The man helped me to brush my teeth;
"Clean the tongue, it won't budge me
Rinse the mouth,
There's nothing anxious
if water splashes all over me."
Eye level with the cabinet doors,
Sitting still,
I see a soap freshly wrapped
With elite fragrance π§Ό
I feared the swirling froth,
Soaking well in my maroon socks,
Mingled with razors, blood, and a men shaving cream. πͺ πͺ
I saw a round mirror with a black rectangular basin
I didn't flinch
I saw a clean reflection
Of my husband's gentle face-
Divinely guided, weak smile, thorny beards.
I looked behind
to reach out to my reality:
No shaving foam and gel.
I saw an elegant mirror designed with
Rare gems and expensive metals,
I smiled at the reflection of my dear husband.
He gently stroked my hair
with his musk scented hands,
The light filled the room
slowly, silently, and then all at once!
The disturbance of routine has now gone.
the stillness of moment-
I welcome you with an open heart.
The objects of reflection and foam were none
The 'light' filled the apartment;
The reality after death is a land of resurrection
Wowww
ReplyDeleteThis shows the power of Imagination and creative expression in writing.
Thank you so much for giving your precious time for this work, and your words for it. It means a lot. :")
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ReplyDeleteJazakallah khair ♥️πΈ
DeleteWow just reading it makes me feel that am standing there
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Deleteππalways wonderful
ReplyDeleteThank you sugarcup✨️
DeleteBabyyyy I just read “i don’t brush my teeth” and OMGGGG
ReplyDeleteI need a moment to breathe… because WHAT did I just read???
It’s deep. It’s dreamy. It’s divine.
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You literally turned brushing teeth into this whole emotional, spiritual experience!!
That man gently tying your hair, Barfi songs in the background, minty toothpaste and memories?? Like??? Only YOU can make that hit so hard
I was soft smiling one moment and emotionally spiraling the next
(in the best way possible)
That line — “Clean the tongue, it won’t budge me...”
It felt like someone hugging my soul and saying “you’re safe now.”
And the ending???
“The reality after death is a land of resurrection”
I literally got goosebumps.
Sad? No. Hopeful. Healing. Powerful.
You made the end feel like light, not darkness.
☁️✨
Every detail—the maroon socks, the razors, the mirrors changing colors, the light filling the room—it’s all soooo cinematic, like I was watching it unfold in my head.
You’ve got magic in your words, babe.
Like genuinely. Don’t stop writing. Ever.
Also, now brushing my teeth will never be just “brushing my teeth” again
(you’ve ruined me in the most poetic way possible)
Love youuu
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Your Deepika diπ«°
You know me so well. I've no words to say how much you understand the notion of this poem. All because you are very close to my heart. Thank you for giving it a read after days of hectic schedules. I love you. Thank you so much again for always holding me with words and care.
Delete"Munazzaaa, yeh dil le jaa tum!
ReplyDeleteYour words just hugged my heart so tight π₯Ίπ€
I’ll always read whatever you write, even if it takes time—because your poems deserve to be felt, not just read.
You write from a place so deep, so real... it's impossible not to connect. I'm just lucky that I get to witness your magic up close.
Love you always, my poet soul. Always here to hold you with words, warmth, and care.
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Allahumma barik, your poem is so awesome π€✨ππ»
ReplyDeleteAll the blessings for you too, my sugar cupπΈ π« thank you for your giving it a read π€✨
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